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Hello, everyone.

Let me introduce my favorite city.

I wanna visit London in UK.

Because I like british traditional feel and rock group Muse.

And There are wonderful buildings in London.

I am going to London for 20 years old.

I will go alone.

First place I will visit in London is the Big Ben.

In a nice sunny day, I'm thinking of visiting the Trafalgar square, to be among crowd as to sense the liveliness of people in London.

After that, it would be wonderful to take pictures of London riding the famous London Eye.

And when I get hungry I wish to taste the food from Fish and Chips.

My final destination would be the Albert Hall. It would be a shame to leave London without watching any show in there.

All this is my dream of visiting London. Given the chance, I wish I can make my dream come reality very soon.

Thank you for listening.

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그리고 이문장 대부분을 영작해주신 "드러워서가입"님께 감사

because -> it's because
traditional feel -> tradition
I am going to Londod for 20 years <--??? 무슨말이죠

I'm planning to go to London when I'm twenty years old 이 말 하고 싶으신듯 ㅎ

ㄴ 또 도움을 주시네요 ㅠ 감사드려요